Edits (2nd draft)

Well, I manage to cut the length from 9800 word, all the way to 6800. Still needs a lot of editing and some clarity.

The pace is a little fast and needs some slowing in several places. Rhythm and flow should be consistent and what I have in total is not.

Also, I am thinking I need to give Eddie something more to create an emotional attachment between him and the reader.

Anyways, it is coming along and the 3rd draft is always the hardest for me. (by then, I've grown too attached to my darlings.)

We will see how this edit turns out. (hoping to get below 5500 words.)